Category: Writers Block
I just wrote, freehand, and this is what came out, it's my first attempt at poetic stuff for over a year, don't know if it's worth anything. I'd be interested to know what yall think as there is a good deal of symbolic stuff in there.
I'm in that small dark room,
The door you'll see and pass.
Walking chearfully away and never knowing what was behind it.
Because you never bothered to open it.
I hear the footsteps.
They stop, I shutter.
She stands in the doorway.
She looks in with a curious glance.
I must stand I must face her.
If not I will lose myself.
I fall away from her.
Shrink back and scream in angwish.
Bleeding from remembered woonds, or the anticipation of them.
Or bleeding because they're self-inflicted, my own weapons causing the pain.
And she turns away.
the hallway is bleek again.
The echos of her voice, echo my own voice, again and again and again.
For as she turned away, I thought I heard her say it.
I thought I heard it, and my heart agreed with her.
I thought I heard the words as she killed me.
As I put the gun to my head and new they were true.
For how could she say them and they not be so?
How pathetic.
and I agree yet again and scream it.
How pathetic!
Wow. Dark and very powerful I think. It's a great poem and you should continue writing because if your other stuff is anything like that, wow.
One of the best I've read lately.
hay! thanks, lol praze like that might just convince me to do so. Now if I could only improve my spelling...haha
Like many poems on here, it's dark. But, I like it. Please keep writing.
Bob
hmm. at least you consider your spelling, unlike most other things i read from other sites. and the others are right, that's great. You should keep this up. Hope summer ain't too boring for ya anyways.